Most cold messages get ignored for the same three reasons: too long, too vague, or asking for too much too soon. Fix those and an average template becomes a good one.
- Short enough to read on a phone Four to six lines. If they have to scroll, they will not.
- One specific reason you fit Your role, your years, and your top two tools, matched to what they hire for. Specific beats impressive.
- One small ask Can I send my resume? Are you open to a 15-minute chat? Never "any help would be appreciated", which gives them nothing to say yes to.
The opening line is where most messages die:
LinkedIn DMs
1. To a recruiter, no specific role
Hi [first name], I came across your profile while looking into [company]. I'm a [your role] with [X] years in [top 2 tools or skills], most recently at [current or last company]. I noticed you hire for [type of roles], so I'd love to be on your radar if something relevant comes up. Happy to send my resume if useful. [Your name]
2. To a hiring manager, no open role
Hi [first name], I've been following [company]'s work on [specific product, project or area], especially [one specific thing]. I'm a [your role] with a background in [top 2 relevant skills]. I'd love to hear what your team is working on and where it's heading. Would you be open to a 15-minute chat sometime in the next couple of weeks? [Your name]
3. When you have just applied to a posting
Hi [first name], I just applied for the [role] at [company] and wanted to reach out directly too. I have [X] years in [top 2 skills from the job description], and recently [one specific, relevant result, with a number if you have one]. Happy to send my resume here if that's easier. [Your name]
Send this one fast. In our own listing data, half of the listings that came down were gone within 10 days of being posted. A message in week three is often a message about a job that is already filled.
Asking for a referral, without being that person
A referral is the biggest ask on this page, so it cannot go in the first message. It is a three-step sequence, spread over days or weeks.
4. The connection note
Hi [first name], your post about [topic] stuck with me, especially [one detail]. Would love to connect and keep following your work.
Keep it under 200 characters. LinkedIn caps connection notes, and free accounts get the tightest limit, plus only a handful of personalised notes a month. Spend them on the people you most want to reach.
5. First message, two or three days after they accept
Hey [first name], thanks for connecting! I really enjoyed your recent post on [topic], especially the part about [detail]. Are you still at [company]? I'd love to hear what your team works on.
6. The ask, only after a genuine back and forth
Hey [first name], I've really enjoyed our chats. I noticed [company] is hiring for [role], and from what you've told me about the team, I think I'd be a strong fit. Would you be open to referring me, or pointing me to the right person? Totally fine if not, no pressure at all. Here's the posting: [link]
"Or pointing me to the right person" gives them a yes that costs nothing. People who would never put their name on a stranger will happily forward a message, and that forward is often how the referral happens anyway.
The cold email
Email works when you can find a real address, usually the recruiter or hiring manager at a smaller company. Put the role and your value in the subject line, because that is the only part they are guaranteed to read.
7. To a recruiter
Subject: [Your role], [X] years in [top skill], open to new roles Hi [first name], I'm a [your role] with [X] years of experience in [top 2 or 3 skills], most recently [one line on what you did and for whom, with a number if you have one]. I'm exploring [type of role] opportunities in [city] or remote, and I'd love to connect if you work with teams hiring for this. My resume is attached. [Your name] [LinkedIn URL]
Ten tailored emails beat two hundred identical ones. Mass sends from your personal address get flagged as spam, and once that happens even your real applications start landing in junk folders.
The follow up
8. When you have heard nothing back
Subject: Following up, [role] application Hi [first name], I applied for the [role] on [date] and wanted to follow up briefly. I'm genuinely excited about it, and my experience with [one skill from the job description] lines up closely with what the team needs. Happy to send anything else that would help. [Your name]
Send it about five working days after applying. After an interview, swap the first line for "Thanks again for the conversation on [date]" and wait until five working days past the date they gave you, or a week if they gave none.
Then stop. One follow up is keen. Three is a reason to say no.
Make any of these sound like you
A template is a skeleton. The detail you add is what gets the reply, and this prompt does the fitting in about a minute.
Here is a cold outreach template: [paste template] Personalise it for: Company: [company name] Person: [name and their role] Role I'm targeting: [role] My most relevant experience: [one or two lines] One specific thing about this company I genuinely find interesting: [detail] Keep it under 6 lines. Sound like a real person. No buzzwords, no "I hope this finds you well", no exclamation marks.
The last field matters most. If you cannot fill in one genuine thing about the company, that is a sign to spend two more minutes on their site before you hit send.
Send five good messages a week, not fifty bad ones. Pick the companies first, find one real person at each, and make every message impossible to mistake for a mass send.
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